For My Future Self

Story Title: 5/5
The title of you’re story caught my interest, although the words were simple they brought in a strong aura for me to be curious enough to read it. Daebak author-nim! ^^

Graphics: 7/10
You didn’t have any posters or background images but you did have a character chart introducing your characters and that was a good thing since you have a bunch of them and it gave the reader an idea on what type of person your characters are like.

Description and Foreword: 10/10
I absolutely fell in love with your description. It had a tinge of sadness but in the end there was a little light of hope growing and I knew immediately it’ll be a good story.

Characterization: 8/10
Your characters were portrayed in a realistic and non-superficial way. I really understood them and there weren’t any of those cliched like characters that everyone seems to be writing these days so kudos to you for originality!

Plot: 38/40
Your plot for “For My Future Self” was an original and it had a very personal feeling towards. I actually read your prequel to this story to get a general idea of where this story was to be headed. Too be honest I was actually a but surprised with the plot, I originally thought there will be something between Baekhyun and Eunji but there wasn’t so that drew me to surprise. The reason why you didn’t get full marks for this section is because I felt at some parts of your story it was a bit dry and lacking something at some moments. But I know that this story’s main theme was friendship and it was still awesome but just maybe for next time add a little twist of romance in between just to keep things interesting.

Consistency: 5/5
I could see the consistency and continuation from your prequel to this story. Your paragraphs and sentences also flowed well from the beginning to the end.
Grammar and writing style: 9/10
You’re spelling and grammar was perfect! No mistakes!!! (YAAYYYY!!)
I really liked your writing style, it had this very mature and calm feeling when you’re reading it and it was easy to follow.

Readers’ Response: 5/5
Judging from other readers responses I can definitely see that you have engaged their interest and had their empathy. Well done! 🙂
Grammar and writing style: /10

Over-all enjoyment: 9/10
I really enjoyed reading your story and it felt nice to read something different for once in a while. You did an excellent job with your character development and plot line, I felt the connection to Baekhyun in every sentence I read and you totally deserve every mark you got.

Total Score: 87/100

Reviewer’s Note:
Great job on your story author-nim! I apologize for taking so long, I had work and my laptop was playing up on me -_-. Anyway I hope you continue writing more stories because I believe you have a gift and talent for writing. Just a quick and gentle reminder to please credit us at Starz Shop and to remember to comment below once you’ve picked up. Failure to do so we unfortunately, will have to blacklist you from the shop and we seriously don’t want to do that, so please remember! And lastly, we hope to see you again at Starz Shop!

Can You Keep A Secret?

Can You Keep A Secret?

Title (9/10):
You changed your story title during the time I was first reading it, but it’s fine. Anyway, I found the new title better, in some sense, it gave a more complicating and mature feel for the story line and it opened up my curiosity to read it. Well done!

Description & Foreword (10/10):
I absolutely loved your foreword and description! You used simple words but yet made it sound complicated and gave a dark and sad aura to the storyline. You even put in a little extract in the story and trailer was amazing! And the character chart was a good idea for this story since well, I found that it was good of you to introduce your characters first since you did tag this story under “twist”. Also yeah, great job for crediting all the peoples you hired! ^^

Graphics (10/10):
Your poster matched with the theme and tone with the story and definitely set in the mood and atmosphere to make the story effective! Your trailer also gave a very dramatic and nice touch. Whoever did your graphics did a brilliant job capturing the essence of it.

Character Development (10/10):
The characters are portrayed in a realistic way, they don’t sound at all superficial. I really admired how you developed and chose the way you created your characters. You did an astounding job with your character development, there were a lot of twist and turns plus unexpected changes in your characters. Daebak author-nim!

Appearance (10/10):
The font that has been used fits the story very well, it is very convenient to read the story. It’s not too large or not too small that it could bother the readers to continue reading. The story is very well structured and therefor easy to follow. I also loved your layouts! They brought the whole story to life and played well with the text!

Originality & Plot (10/10):
This story is definitely an original! It was so cleverly written and you have such great talent and purely big imagination to come up with a plot like this! Words cannot express of emphasise any further how I feel about this section.

Flow (10/10):
Your flow was spot on it flowed beautifully from the beginning to the last chapter! It was like I was in a movie watching scene after scene. Full marks for this one!

Writing (10/10):
Like I said in the originality and plot section, this story was definitely a clever idea. Your ideas are well conveyed in this story and it’s also rather clear how you want the story to go on. It’s very understandable and enjoyable to read your story. Your story played like a movie in my head, I could picture everything very well and your writing was truly beautiful.

Grammar & Spelling (6/10):
There were some grammar and spelling errors in all of the chapters, they weren’t too bad but it’s too much for me to list down. Please go back to them and re-read to fix those mistakes. (I know you’re editing now, so maybe you have fixed some of them 🙂 )

General Enjoyment (9/10):
I can honestly tell you that I thoroughly enjoyed reading and reviewing this story. You did an extravagant job with it and I can see your heart and soul poured into this. You have an amazing gift for writing and all I can do is encourage you to write more!

Total score: 94/100

Reviewer: Bestfriend4eva

Reviewed on: 5/10/2014

Comments and thoughts: I think I pretty much written everything I felt about your fic in this review, but I do want to say one more thing regarding to you editing. Next time, can you please not put it through under editing when you request for a review? Not only did not only inconvenience me, but it also frustrated my admin workers a little and made me having to extend my review time and made you wait longer. Normally I take about a week to finish a chaptered request, but because of this I took longer than usual. Anyway, fantastic job and don’t forget to credit the shop and me, plus fix up those errors!

XOXO
Aera (BF4E)

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So, It’s You

Title: So, It’s You
Author: blueleeyoorae
Characters: Luhan,OC,Baekhyun
Genre: Romance
Category: B*G
Status: On-going (9 Chap)
Description: Text.

Title (8.5/10):
Well as far as I know, the title “So It’s You” hasn’t been used before so yehet! Points for originality! XD, the title captivated my interest and I knew it would be one of them cute romances (which it is) so good job!

Description & Foreword (10/10):
Your description definitely gave me a taste on what the story was going to be about! I loved it! It was short, sweet and simple and I could tell it was going to be a great story! You emphasized the words “So It’s You” in bold, making it a statement and it played well with the title. Omg your foreword was so cuteh! And could see that you have credited all of your artists and promoters! Good luck for your writing comp btw! ^^

Graphics (5/10):
Honestly, I didn’t really like the poster. It was a bit plain and the colour scheme and layout lacked something to me. Maybe that was the look you were going for, but I believe that every poster should have the power to captivate the reader’s interest, and this poster, unfortunately didn’t do the trick.

Character Development (10/10):
You’re characters weren’t portrayed in an overly cliched manner and they seemed realistic enough, like they were actual people. I think you did a wonderful job with your characters, especially with Kyungmi! I could feel a strong connection and empathy with her, like I really knew her. Full marks for this section! ^^

Appearance (10/10):
The font that was used was excellent! It was very easy to read and wasn’t too freakishly large or tiny that would frustrate the hell out of the reader to not bother continue reading it. The story was also well structured and the chapter lengths were great, neither too long or short. In short, you’re story structure’s appearance met at the top satisfactory standard. Well done!

Originality & Plot (9.5/10):
I’ve read a couple of fics with the main character being a sibling or relative of a Kpop Idol before, but this one was different. It was more personal and it was trailing with originality! The way you wrote your story made the difference and I loved your ideas!

Flow (10/10):
Your flow was spot on it flowed beautifully from the beginning to the last chapter! I felt like I was actually in the story, and I could picture it all really clearly! ^^

Writing (9/10):
Your ideas were well conveyed in this story and it’s also rather clear how you want the story to go on. All the chapters were smooth and exciting to read and it was flowing into me like it was some movie in my head. This story is definitely Kdrama or shoujo manga material!

Grammar & Spelling (6.5/10):
There were a few mistakes that weren’t too terrible, but I suggest you fix them up Asap! ^^

Chapter 5:

“I just give* Sehun a company to buy bubble tea. He is still at the bubble tea store right across this park.” I looked at the direction Luhan had pointed *to. “And I’m not afraid, though. No one will recognize me since I am not that famous.” He chuckled.
*came
*to (add to)

It was the mixture of chocolate and rose*. I liked the smell.
*roses

His gaze fell at Sehun’s bubble tea. “Why didn’t you tell me that you’re going to buy bubble tea? I want *too!”
*wanted one too

Chapter 6:

“*Ups,” she said. I could hear laughter around me. “I slipped.”
*Oops

All this time I stayed strong, ignoring those harsh words and harsh treatment they were giving me. I tried to befriend with them. I never reported them to *teacher;
To *the teacher

Maybe I suffered from *claustrophobic.
*claustrophobia, honey 🙂

Chapter 7:

Luhan led me to a food *tend. The ahjumma almost closed the shop when she saw us. I ordered a plate of tteokpeokki while Luhan ordered bibimbap. The both of us ate in silence. I could feel Luhan was staring at me, well, more like my forehead.
*tent

Chapter 8:

What if Hyejin and her *gank found out about this?? What if we start up rumors? What if it affects Luhan and his group’s career? *And millions more bad thoughts crossed my mind that I didn’t notice Luhan had his face a few inches from mine.
*gang
*no need for the word “and”

Chapter 9:

Sehun chuckled as he patted my shoulder. “Chillax, Kyungmi. Hyung was just kidding. Geez, why are you so *panic?”
*panicky

Chapter 10:

“You sure have a loud voice for someone so *quite.”
*quiet

I felt a few light hits on my back and soon realized that Baekhyun was tapping my back to help me lessen my *chocking. “Are you okay? Why are you *chocking suddenly?”
*choking

General Enjoyment (10/10):
KAYYYYYYY!!!! I’m really, really, really, REALLY Enjoying your story so far! It’s cute and funny with a slight twist of sadness in it but I seriously love it so far! You have done a brilliant job! Praise for all the LuMi moments! XD

Total score: 88.5/100
Reviewer: BestFriend4eva
Reviewed on: 09/09/2014
Comments and thoughts: Keep up the good work dear! Just be sure to go through your story and check for errors before publishing! Can’t wait for your next update and I wish you all the best for ur writing comp! ^^
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All For You

Title (5/10):
Your title “All For You” made an interesting approach to me. The title caught my curiosity, but I honestly found the connection from the title to the story quite lacking. Don’t get me wrong, it was a good title, it just didn’t fit well with your plot.Description & Foreword (8.5/10):
Le description for this one-shot was very mysterious and intriguing. I liked it! It got me pumped to read it and I couldn’t wait to find out more! XD Keke, I laughed at you’re foreword, it brought me such great amusement as you reminded me so much of myself. (I start new stories even tho I haven’t even finished my other ones 🙂 ) Great job on this section!

Graphics (6.5/10):
Hmmmm… the poster held the elements of the story on what I thought it would be like, but after reading your plot, I found that it was a bit different from what I expected. The poster was nice but it was missing something to really give it the spark it needed, I personally felt that the graphic artist should’ve made the characters slightly bigger and use different colours to contrast. Then again, this might’ve been the style you were going for and that’s what you wanted.

Character Development (6.5/10):
The characters were portrayed in a unique kind of way but I found it difficult to get a connection with the characters and myself, to me they weren’t personal and they didn’t have a strong personality. I couldn’t feel their emotions, I wanted to feel what Hyemi was feeling when Luhan broke up with her, but I just couldn’t. Perhaps maybe you should try writing in 1st POV next time. 🙂

Appearance (10/10):
The font that was used was excellent! It was very easy to read and wasn’t too freakishly large or tiny that would frustrate the hell out of the reader to not bother continue reading it. The chapter length was great, neither too long or short. In summary, your story structure’s appearance meant at the top satisfactory standard. Well done!

Originality & Plot (7/10):
I’m not gonna lie, I have read many stories that are mainly one shots similar to yours but that doesn’t mean it wasn’t good. This story has potential, have you considered taking another direction for it? The plot was interesting enough though 🙂

Flow (6.5/10):
Your flow was a bit choppy at some points, I have acknowledged the fact that you did say it was rushed and you didn’t edit it. Some words of advice, when writing a story, always re-read it before publishing it out. It will save you time for going back to it after other people have read it, and it would save any potential embarrassment.

Writing (7.5/10):
Your ideas were highlighted in this story, and it was great! Omg Soyoung was hilarious! You had such cute and funny moments in it! But like you said before, it was rushed. I honestly felt that is was quite un-professional and a little disheartening to hear. A good story can never be rushed dear, it takes time to develop.

Grammar & Spelling (5.5/10):
Uhhhh, there were quite a bunch of spelling and grammar mistakes, they weren’t too terrible but it was slightly frustrating at some points.

Foreword:
I’ll PM you the rest of my edits, also just to let you know, for your sequel “And then I Meet You” I spotted a few mistakes that I think you should quickly fix up.

“And then I *meet you”

(think you meant Met?)

They met each other.
And then they fall in love.
They promise* to never let go of each other.
And he broke the promise.

That was 10 years ago…

Now, Luhan come back into Hye Mi’s life.
And Hye Mi wants revenge.
But does* she succeed?
And is it true that Luhan still own* the* special place in her heart?

*promised
*will
*owns
*a, not the.

General Enjoyment (9/10):
This story had some good elements and ideas in it, but the problem was that is was just too rushed making it scattered all over the shop. But for your first angst, it’s not bad 🙂 I enjoyed it.

Total score: 70/100
Reviewer: BestFriend4eva
Reviewed on: 02/09/2014
Comments and thoughts: First of all, I would like to say that I’m very honest in my opinion and I do mean each word with love. I’m only doing this because I want you to improve and I believe that you do have a great grasp for writing, you just need to apply yourself further and not rush things. Like I said before, good stories take time, and I think you consider sitting back and let the story come out at it’s own place, new ideas will always come to replace the forgotten ones. Just close your eyes and take a deep breath and believe. I believe in you and I know one day, you’ll write something amazing.
Best wishes for the future dear! Fighting!
XOXO Aera (BF4E)

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Turn Around & Look At Me, Coming Soon!

Paparazzi Next Door

– Author / Profile Name : forgottensnow68
– Profile Link : http://www.asianfanfics.com/profile/view/776241
– Co-Author(s): NONE
– Story Title : Paparazzi Next Door

– Main Characters : OC, EXO OT12
– Story Status : Chaptered (ongoing) 0-10
– GENRE : fluff, romance, drama, comedy
– CATEGORY: Boy x Girl
– rated : No

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Title (10/10):
The title “Paparazzi next Door” screamed creativity and drama and I couldn’t wait to start reading it! It was a great play of words and it definitely caught my interest and attention. Well done.

Description & Foreword (9/10):
I LOVE, LOVE, LOVE (see what I did there XP) you’re description! It was really smooth and it had this sophisticated and mature vibe that made me wanna read it. It also didn’t give away the full story plot which was excellent because I hate it when writer reveal the whole plot in just one paragraph. You did a pro job my dear! ^^ Moving on to le description, it was really intriguing and it totally brought life into the foreword.

Graphics (9.5/10):
You’re poster was so freakin’ cute and adorable! I could see all of the elements that was being used in the story and it was definitely eye catching and went well with the storyline! You’re graphic artist did a great job!

Character Development (10/10):
The characters were portrayed in a realistic way, they weren’t all portrayed in a clichéd manner and I found a strong connection with them. I was especially impressed our you portrayed Kim Nae Rim, her reason for plotting revenge wasn’t what I expected and she setted up the spark that was needed to develop the story. In summary, you did an excellent job with you’re character development and I can’t wait to see more! 🙂

Appearance (10/10):
The font that was used was excellent! It was very easy to read and wasn’t too freakishly large or tiny that would frustrate the hell out of the reader to not bother continue reading it. The story was also well structured and the chapter lengths were great, neither too long or short. In short, you’re story structure’s appearance meant at the top satisfactory standard. Well done!

Originality & Plot (10/10):
Your plot for “Paparazzi Next Door” is definitely an original. I’ve read and reviewed some fics that had a pap as the main character but this one really stood out because it was different! You own this story gull! I absolutely loved the ideas you came up with and can’t wait for the next chap!

Flow (10/10):
Your flow was spot on it flowed beautifully from the beginning to the last chapter! It was like I was in a movie watching scene after scene. Full marks for this one!

Writing (10/10):
Your ideas were well conveyed in this story and it’s also rather clear how you want the story to go on. All the chapters were smooth and exciting to read and it was flowing into me like it was some movie in my head. This story is definitely Kdrama or movie material! You should be writing scripts or something! ^^

Grammar & Spelling (10/10):
You’re grammar and spelling was great! NO ERRORSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS!!!*Throws confetti*
This is a first for me because every single time I always pick up one or two minor errors, so great job!

General Enjoyment (9/10):
This story was constructed to magnificently well! From the way you portrayed and wrote about you’re characters to the plot… I’m really enjoying your story so far! Anticipating the next chapter!
Total score: 97.5/100
Reviewer: Bestfriend4eva
Reviewed on: 23/08/2014
Comments and thoughts: You totally served every mark you got! I couldn’t really write much as this story only has a few chapters but I can’t wait to see how the story develops and un-folds! Totally subscribing and upvoting!
Keep writing and best wishes!

XOXO
Aera (BF4E)

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Last Glimpse

Title: Last Glimpse
Author: yehet061190
Characters: Suho, Kris
Genre: angst, tragedy, friendship
Rating: /
Status: Completed (16 Chap)
Description: Suho is very happy to know that Kris will come back to EXO, in fact not only him, but all of EXO members are happy.

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Title (10/10):
The title “Last Glimpse “fitted perfectly with the story, I could see the relevance of the title to the story and it stood out in a simple but stand-outtish way to attract readers. The title personally captured my interest immediately so well done!

Description & Foreword (7/10):
Hmmmm… to be honest, I had mixed feelings about your description. It was quite direct in a way when you said that it was inspired by 48 hours but only it wasn’t exactly a survival story. Honestly, the first line was a bit questioning… it didn’t exactly give the plot away, or give a slightly more of a hint. Normally I wouldn’t want to know what the whole story is about by reading the description because I find that very annoying and must well just read the blurb and be done and dusted without bothering reading the plot. But for this story you kind of needed to give more information about what it’s about. It personally, confused me a bit and didn’t know exactly what I was suppose to expect. Moving on to you’re forward though, it was amazeballs! I like how you gave a small passage from the fic. It definitely made me wanna read your story to fine out more. Great job for this part!

Graphics (8/10):
Your poster most definitely setted in the theme and mood for the story. It gave a very dark and mysterious feel with a twist of sadness and a slight glimpse of the feeling of regret. The character’s images and background image was well chosen to match up with the storyline and I loved the font! You’re graphic artist did an amazing job!

Character Development (10/10):
The characters were portrayed in a realistic way, they don’t sound at all superficial and neither were they written in a typically clichéd kind of way. I really admired the way how you described them so perfectly. It felt like I really, seriously knew them and was greatly impressed on how you portrayed Yerin. How her character developed throughout the story, it was so unexpected and no one ever saw it coming. You did a remarkable job in your character development section. Words just can’t express any further. Full marks!

Appearance (10/10):
The font that was used was excellent! It was very easy to read and wasn’t too freakishly large or tiny that would frustrate the hell out of the reader to not bother continue reading it. The story was also well structured and the chapter lengths were great, neither too long or short. In short, you’re story structure’s appearance meant at the top satisfactory standard. Well done!

Originality & Plot (10/10):
Your plot for “Last Glimpse” is undeniably original. Never in my entire 2 years of reviewing have I came across a story plot like this one. You really nailed this story! I was seriously amazed that someone can actually come up with such a plot. Your ideas were creative and smart! “Last Glimpse” brought a lot of intensity and heart clenching moments for myself. Heck! It even brought tears in my eyes, it was THAT GOOD EPICALLY AMAZING! And I seriously hate and love you at the same time for coming up with this storyline, aha. 😛

Flow (10/10):
Your flow was spot on it flowed beautifully from the beginning to the very end. It felt like I was walking through a KDrama, witnessing scene after scene.

Writing (10/10):
Your ideas were well conveyed in this story and it’s also rather clear how you want the story to go on. All the chapters were so descriptive and there were a lot of emotional and personal feelings poured into it. I still can’t get over the fact that someone can write a story like this but you my dear have totally proven yourself worthy! Defs can become a script writer because this story is totally Kdrama material!

Grammar & Spelling (9.5/10):
You’re grammar and spelling was great! Only there was one to two small, minor mistakes that you needed to fix up. But other than that it was all fine 🙂

Corrections:
Chapter 14:
“if you love Kris so much, at least make sure that Suho is *died! I don’t care of anything. I just want EXO to disappear! S.M. Company to deteriorate!”

*dead not died.

Chapter 15:

Kim Youngmin was no better than that. He almost lost his *live because of the violence of the prisoners there.

*life

General Enjoyment (10/10):
This story was constructed to magnificently well. From the way you portrayed and wrote about you’re characters to the plot… I’m just speechless. This story felt almost believable, like if EXO really died over such a terrible cause. I almost couldn’t bear myself to read it because I felt so sad and wanted to run for the hills while sobbing my heart out. But… no I couldn’t do that XP haha. But this just goes to show how talented you are as a writer to make you’re reader feel this way, to take them to a different world and to lose themselves into your story. You have earned my respect and admiration! ^^

Total score: 94.5/100
Reviewer: Bestfriend4eva
Reviewed on: 20/08/2014
Comments and thoughts: You totally served every mark you got! You really winged this story dear! Hope you like the review btw ^^, please keep in mind that I tell my honest opinions to help you improve, not to offend you.

Keep writing and best wishes!

XOXO
Aera (BF4E)

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Coming Soon!

Last Romeo by Bestfriend4eva

Credits to: PrincessCharming4999 for the amazingly awesome trailer! ^^

 

EXO One-shot Collection

Title: EXO One-shot Collection
Author: ShinJinYoong
Characters: EXO x OC (OC has no name)
Genre: Angst, romance
Rating: K (Kid-friendly)
Status: On-going
Description: Falling in love makes you feel like the most fortunate person in the world. Whereas falling out of love makes the world seem like as if it is crumbling down onto you.

 
Title (7.5/10): 
Well, your title was very accurate for what you were writing XD, but for me it was kinda lacking something, to make it more memorable if you know what I mean? Maybe next time add another word to make a catchier title. But yeah, it’s kinda hard I guess since you’re writing a bunch of oneshots. 
 
Description & Foreword (8/10): 
Your description and foreword were very straight forward, which was good, for next time maybe add a bit more spark to it? Just to keep things interesting. 🙂 
 
Graphics (–/10): Since you didn’t want me to grade this, we added the ten possible points here to the “Writing” section. ^^
 
Character Development (9/10): 
You developed your characters fairly well, I liked how you wrote in POV by the way, it made it more personal and omg for your latest story my heart clenched for poor Chanyeol >//<. You’re doing well so far! Hwaiting! ^^
 
Appearance (9/10):
Font size was excellent, easy to read, and very easy to follow through. I liked your layout, at the front too! 
 
Originality & Plot (8.5/10): 
Your story plot for the first chap really cute and adorable! >//< your story plot was quite original and oh the fluffiness I couldn’t deal!~ ^^. Can’t really say for the other two though because those plots were given, although you did a really awesome job writing them! Daebak! 
 
Flow (10/10): 
Your chapters flowed through very well, from the beginning to the end. It wasn’t choppy and it was enjoyable to read. 
 
Writing (20/20): 
I loved the way you wrote your stories! They were really short and sweet! (Although some were so sad TT^TT) You’re such a good writer! I see improvements of your skills in each chapter and I really want to encourage you with that! Hope you write more soon! 
 
Grammar & Spelling (9.5/10): 
There was a minor mistake for your contents page. You missed the other ‘l” for “allows”, other than that everything seems fine! 
 
General Enjoyment (9/10): 
Really love your one shots so far! Hope you write more soon! 

Total score: 87/100
Reviewer: Bestfriend4eva (Aera) 
Reviewed on: June 11, 2014
Comments and thoughts: You are doing amazing so far! You have great potential and I can see all the improvements in each chapter! You have a gift my dear, you just need to keep writing and you’ll get better! Hope to hear from you soon! Oh btw, I’m really into your fic “Just Once” hoping for an update soon~ ^^
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Escape To Oblivion

Title: Escape to Oblivion

Author: Unnie-Maya 

Characters: Baekhyun / Jongin, Tao / SeHun, Kris / Kyungsoo

Genre: Angst, Romance, Smut/Rated M

Rating: M (Mature content)

Status: Ongoing

Description: Baekhyun is a student who moonlights as a bartender. When his boss closes the bar, he’s employed at the club hosts. There, he meets Jongin – the best of hosts, who’s a conundrum to everyone. Baekhyun is defending himself against a feeling, that was coming inexorably. At all costs, he wants to know the truth about Jongin, who has a very bad reputation among the rest of the employees in the club. Baekhyun decides to change that. However, there are many unpleasant surprises along the way waiting for him. Is the feeling, which he has for the host will be  strong enough so that he can overcome obstacles and change their lives for better?

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Title (9/10): 

Your title “Escape To Oblivion” is a rather interesting title, it gives a very mature feeling to the story and it goes well together with the plot. 

 

Description & Foward (10/10): 

Okay, moving on to your description and foreword, I don’t really know how to describe the feeling but it was really cool to read! 🙂 I liked how you did a short and simple description using some mature vocabulary. 
 

Graphics (8.5/10): 

Your poster was awesome! Loved how you had a very simple off white background because it highlighted Baek and Kai as your main characters, also the pictures you chose matched well with the storyline as well so big tick for that. The quote you chose “Fall in love with a host?!” made me even more interested with the story because I don’t normally read stories like yours, so yeah, it was a nice change of my range. (And I’m getting side tracked here… eheheh) Personally though, I found the other character’s names on your poster a bit distracting in a way because it was just there to fill in the gaps and it looked kinda cluttered, to me. But other than that your poster was brill! 🙂

 

Character Development (10/10): 

I LOVED how you developed Baek’s character! I felt like I was him to whole time, I can see you put a lot of effort developing your characters and making them really individual and unique in their own way. I’ve read some stories where the author’s character development wasn’t that great or interesting, or just way too sloppy. But yours was really good so THANK YOU! 

 

Appearance (10/10): 

Font size was excellent, easy to read, and very easy to follow through. I liked your layout, it gave something extra special to your chapters 🙂
 

Originality & Plot (9/10): 

To be honest I haven’t read a lot of yaoi fics as I prefer not to, in fact this is my third yaoi I’ve read, so I’m just going to congratulate you for coming up with something unique original compared to the other two, like seriously they were a total snore fest and they were SOOOO clichéd! I really liked your plot and Baekhyun was soo adorable XD. Well done!
 

 

Flow (10/10): 

Your chapters flowed through very well, from the beginning to the end. It wasn’t choppy and it was enjoyable to read. 

 

Writing (10/10):

I loved the way you wrote your story! It was very professional, and matured (probably also why it’s rated M ) you used very strong vocabulary and it just flowed really well ^^. You seriously have a gift for writing! Hope you update soon btw XD. 

 

Grammar & Spelling (10/10):

And the hallelujah bells are ringing! NO SPELLING OR GRAMMAR MISTAKES!!! *throws confetti* 
I’ve been doing a lot of corrections lately and it was just getting so tiring after a while >//<. Daebak! 
 

 

General Enjoyment (10/10): 

I’m really enjoying your story! You have done an amazing job and hope you update soon! 

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Total score: 96.5/100

Reviewer: Bestfriend4eva (Aera) 

Reviewed on: June 10, 2014

Comments and thoughts: Your story is one of my new favourites right now! Please update soonnnnnn XD haha, I’m seriously enjoying it and I cant wait for your next update! (Also, I apologise if I have any spelling mistakes as I’m on my Ipod) 

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