Kris, Kyungmi (OC), EXO
The Letter He’ll Never See.
Dear Kris….
If you are reading this remember that I’ll always believe in you.
Stay strong and keep smiling……
Li Jiaheng.
– Me
This is a Bestfriend4eva Story
Any similar plot is purely coincidental, I wrote this out of my own imagination.
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Title: Best Friend
Author: fasiha1234
Characters: Lee Hayoung, Kim Jongin/Kai, Wu Yi Fan/Kris
Genre: Romance, Comedy, Slice of Life
Rating: T (Teens)
Status: On-going
Description: What happens when you fall in love with your best friend?
What happens when your best friend starts dating your cousin?
Does it hurt?
Yes it does.
That’s what happened to 17 years old Ha Young.
She fell in love with her best friend Kai – The most popular guy in school.
And when she finally had the courage to confess her love for him, the disaster happens.
Kai announces that he is dating Ha Young’s cousin Krystal – The most popular girl in school
That’s when she realized that ‘Love’ doesn’t always mean hearts and butterflies.
And that’s when she gave up on the word called ‘LOVE’.
Title (8.5/10):
I haven’t seen the title “Best Friend” used for the actual title of a story before, but I know that there are some chapters from other fics, named with that title. Your title and the story went well together with your storyline, but personally, I felt that you could have done slightly better if you chose a much more unique and memorable title to use. But other than that it was okay. 🙂
Description & Foreward (10/10):
Your description and foreword was well written, you really captured my interest for your story and I couldn’t wait to start reading! I also loved your trailer! It definitely flowed together with your foreword and I just, loved it. XD (words can’t express)
Graphics (10/10):
Your poster was awesome! You made a very good choice for your pictures for your characters, and I liked the poster with the simple white background that complimented the red font for the title. The colour brought attention to the title which made it stand out. And the words “Love is not my style after all” was a great play of words to use for your title because it hinted a bit on what your story was gonna be about by just looking at your poster. Whoever is your graphic artist did an excellent job!
Character Development (10/10):
You’re character development was well written and planned, I could really feel their emotions and my heart clenched every time Hayoung got hurt because of Kai, get annoyed every time Krystal or Mei Li rocked up and RLAB on your Kris moments! ^^ You have a very strong point for developing your characters, daebak!
Appearance (10/10):
Font size was excellent, easy to read, and very easy to follow through. I liked your layout, it gave something extra special to your chapters 🙂
Originality & Plot (9/10):
I have read a lot of fics with a similar idea or plot and most of them are just so clichéd that I go like, “Omg I don’t wanna read anymore!”, but yours, on the other hand, had some plot twists that made the story quite original and I was really into it! XD
Flow (10/10):
Your chapters flowed through very well, from the beginning to the end. It wasn’t choppy and it was enjoyable to read.
Writing (10/10):
I loved the way you wrote your story! it was very professional, and very easy to follow and understand the plot. You, my dear, have such an amazing talent for writing! I could feel your character’s emotions throughout the story (I had a couple of heart clenching moments >//<) Words just cannot express how I feel… It was just DAEBAK!
Grammar & Spelling (7.5/10):
There were some minor grammar and typos throughout your story but it wasn’t too bad. In future just remember to proof read your work before you publish it 🙂
Corrections:
[Chapter 1] …relationship as best friends (to) get ruined
[Chapter 3] *yupp (yup, unless u intended to extend it XD)
[Chapter 5] you* skirt (your)
[I read these parts on my ipod so I’m not sure about which chapters they were in. Sorry >//<]
but what the hell is he doing in MY house at friggin’ 1am in the midnight?!* (it’s 1am in the morning)
they’re Mr and Mrs We. They’re my parent’s close *friend. (friends)
I said holding both side* of my waist with both of my hands. (sides)
“I know alot* about you than you think i kow, Jong In-sshi.” (a lot)
Ouch. What the *h-Hayoung?! (H-Hayoung)
“Why didn’t you tell me?” Kai asked *agrily(angrily)
… when you clearly knew about my *feeling(feelings)
You were the one to keep bragging about your relationship with Krystal although you knew it was hurting *m me to death. (extra ‘m’)
She *blibked a couple of times, trying to get rid of it. (blinked)
She scoffed in *disbelieve (disbelief)
Hayoung held the door *no (knob) as she pulled it, revealing Kai standing *infront (infront) of her.
…then *you.are.wrong.(You. Are. Wrong)
… Such a coincidence. I live *her as well! (here)
I AM ON TOP OF KRIS FUCKING WU WITH MY LIPS *ONTOP *OG HIS! (ON TOP OF)
I entered as well following after her. I *bend and cupped my knees panting heavily(bent)
I read the first three lines with a bored look but my mood automatically *lighten up at the mention of Hayoung (lightened)
General Enjoyment (10/10):
I’m really enjoying your story! You have done an amazing job and you have such a great talent of writing!
Total score: 95/100
Reviewer: Bestfriend4eva (Aera)
Reviewed on: June 5, 2014
Comments and thoughts: Your story is one of my new favourites right now! Please update soonnnnnn XD haha, I’m seriously enjoying it and I cant wait for your next update!
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Title: Because It’s You.
Author: mlctSHINee
Characters: Ahn Windsor (oc), Luhan, Yixing, Lu Jun(oc), Kai.
Genre: Historical, Romance
Rating: T (= PG13)
Status: on-going
Description: Ahn Windsor was the princess of one of the oldest european kingdoms. Lu Han was the son of the chinese emperor.The chinese army suddenly enters Ahn’s kingdom in order to kidnap her and her family. The emperor has passed away and the empire needs a new ruler but it wasn’t possible for Luhan to be it without a wife and a son. Ahn would never let anything happen to her family, but Luhan is someone who always gets what he wants.
Title (7.5/10):
Well I haven’t seen the title “Because It’s You” before so I guess it’s quite original in a way 🙂 but to be honest I don’t exactly see how the story and the title fit together yet, but I’m sure there is a good reason why you chose those words and the meaning will come out eventually.
Description & Foward (9.5/10):
Your description was very straight forward and told a brief description of the plot, I liked it. It wasn’t too much and it wasn’t too little. Well done!
Graphics (10/10):
The poster was awesome! It really went well with the plot and it set the historical mood and the genre of the story. I really liked the pictures you chose and how your poster gave a very dramatic, and a slightly tensed feeling.
Character Development (9/10):
You’re development of characters was definitely well planned and thought of, I can feel your characters emotions and I liked how you portrayed them because it wasn’t the usual clichéd type of characters that a lot of people seem to write about these days. Well done for originality!
Appearance (10/10):
Font size was excellent, easy to read, and very easy to follow through.
Originality & Plot (10/10):
Your story was very original and I truly admire you for writing a historical fic! Not many people use the past to set their story, so I found it quite different and interesting, also your plot is amazing, and quite unpredictable, which I like because I love surprises! You did an excellent job coming up with this story!
Flow (10/10):
Your chapters flowed through very well, from the beginning to the end. It wasn’t choppy and it was enjoyable to read.
Writing (10/10):
I loved the way you wrote your story! it was very professional, and very easy to follow and understand the plot. You are such an amazing writer! XD
Grammar & Spelling (7/10):
There was quite a lot of minor grammar and spelling mistakes that occurred in your chapters, just be sure to go over them and proof read before you publish and you’ll be fine. Other then that it was all good. 🙂
Corrections:
[Chapter] *prince(Prince) Jong In is married and has a son, then he will become emperor,” said headman* (Headman) Zhou.
[Chapter 3] He had already made Yixing *dissappointed, (disappointed)
[Chapter 4] Luhan, maybe he made her cry for some *reaosn. (reason)
I have to see some details for the *weeding(wedding) with *princess (Princess) Ahn.”
[Chapter 5] “So, you’re saying I should stay there untill* (until) Ahn goes back?
Zhou MI (Zhou Mi)
she always dreamt of *his(her) father miraculously letting her get married to Yixing.
[Chapter 6] “I promise, princess* (Princess)
[Chapter 7] He looked good and it made him look like a *chinese prince. (Chinese)
-both *korean and *chinese – arrived at the gate, the *chinese army (Korean, Chinese, Chinese)
The *korean army stood (Korean)
while Lujun bowed *for his*(to her) oppa
*chinese(Chinese) version ge-ge.
“You look lost, *miss(Miss). May I help you with something?”
He wasn’t *chinese. (Chinese)
General Enjoyment (10/10):
Well your story is yet to be complete, so all I can say is keep on going! I’m curious to see what happens next! You are doing such a great job and I’m really enjoying your story! ^^ AND PLEASEEEE MAKE LUHAN X AHN TOGETHER (okay, I’m prob’s being biased cos Luhannie is my bias, but I think he and Ahn suit each other better XD)
Total score: 83/100
Reviewer: Bestfriend4eva (Aera)
Reviewed on: June 4th, 2014
Comments and thoughts: (Already stated in General Enjoyment)
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Title: Foolish Beauty
Author: Hope-For-Snow
Characters: Shin Sang Chan, Xi Luhan
Genre: Romance, angst
Rating: T (Teens)
Status: Completed
Description: Belle, from Beauty and the Beast loved her father and was willing to sacrifice her life to save him. Her kindess and understanding changed Beast and she ended up falling for him. Her beauty, inside and out, made the Beast fall in love with her too.
But, there’s a darker side to another fairy tale.
The Little Mermaid exchanged her beautiful voice just to have a pair of legs and enter the dry land because she had fallen in love with a human. When the prince didn’t love her back, she realized that her actions were simply foolish.
Shin Sang Chan was filthy rich girl who could kill anyone with her face. No it wasn’t undescribable beauty – It was sheer ugliness. Her terribly unattractive appearance plagued who she really was.
Title (9.5/10):
Your title “Foolish Beauty” was a brilliant choice of words and it definitely fitted with the story. The two simple words you chose for your title left a very strong impression on me and got me curious about your story.
Description & Foward (9.5/10):
Your description was beautiful! I really loved how you had some fairy tale references in there, and the quote you used, “The truth is not always beautiful, nor beautiful words the truth.” was a unique description to use. I found the words were very powerful and it gave some hints on what the story was going to be about without exactly telling.
Graphics (10/10):
The poster was amazing, the contrast and layout was beautifully well done and it gave this very sophisticated and mature feel by just looking at it. I personally liked how you had the words, “This is the price for beauty” on your poster and your poster really set the theme for your story. Great job!
Character Development (10/10):
You’re development of characters was definitely well planned, I could feel Sangchan’s pain and anger as you developed her character from a sad, angry, lonely, “ugly girl” who had a good heart to a but couldn’t really show it, change to SuAh, a “beautiful” girl, that eventually became shallow, greedy and heartless, which leaded up to transforming her into a bigger “monster” than she was before. You did an awesome job portraying and developing you main character!
Appearance (10/10):
Font size was excellent, easy to read, and very easy to follow through.
Originality & Plot (10/10):
Your story was definitely unique and different from the type of stories I’ve reviewed before. I could see the originality and effort you put into this story.
Flow (10/10):
You only had one chapter but, it flowed through very well, from the beginning to the end. It was very smooth and enjoyable to read.
Writing (10/10):
I loved the way you wrote your story! it was very professional, and very easy to follow and understand the plot. You, my dear, have such an amazing talent for writing! I could feel your character’s emotions throughout the story (I had a couple of heart clenching moments >//<) Words just cannot express how I feel… It was just DAEBAK!
Grammar & Spelling (8.5/10):
There were some minor grammar and spelling mistakes, but it was that bad so all good! (almost), just be sure to proof read next time so you can go through and edit out the mistakes. 🙂
Le Corrections:
1) *clamor (*clamour, depends where your from, I live in Britain so that’s how the English spell it)
2) *ahold (* A hold)
3) *Die die die (Die. Die. Die. Or Die, die, die)
4) *eyeshadow (eye shadow)
5) * longsleeves (long sleeves)
6) “beautiful woman”which (“beautiful woman” which…. (need a space between))
7) *gray (grey)
General Enjoyment (10/10):
Your story was one of the best stories I’ve ever read so far, it really reminded me on what beauty really is, and gave me a lot of things to reflect upon about what the world’s definition of beauty is.
Total score: 97.5/100
Reviewer: Bestfriend4eva (Aera)
Reviewed on: 5.29.14
Comments and thoughts: I LOVED YOUR STORY!!! It drew the line between natural beauty and man-made beauty. Your story told and showed me a very valuable point that I’ll never ever forget and I can’t wait to read more of your stories. ^^
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Title: We See In Shades of Gray
Author: trueheartandseoul
Characters: Nam Minah (OC and Main), Sehun, Zelo, BAP and EXO (minor characters), Park Eunmi (OC), Kim Rina (OC) and more to come (possibly)
Genre: Angst, Drama, Romance
Rating: T (Teens)
Status: On-going
Description: Minah has always been an average girl. She goes to school, hangs out with her friends and even has a loving boyfriend, Zelo. Everything changes when she finds out that she comes from a strong bloodline of witches who have been hunted for centuries. Minah escapes the hunters with the help of a new mysterious boy, Sehun. He brings her back to Cross Mansion, a safe haven for all supernatural beings. Minah discovers the underground world of the supernatural and is determined to find out more about her past. About her real family. About her powers. About the war with the hunters that has been raging on for thousands of years. One thing is for sure….. all is not fair in love and war.
Title (9.5/10):
The title, “We See In Shades Of Grey” captured my attention and interest of the story just by reading the title, although at the moemnt, I can’t really see how the title and story links together, but I’m sure that will be revealed at some point soon right? 🙂
Description & Foward (9.5/10):
Your description was awesome! I could hear dramatic music playing in the background! It was simple, yet it had that strong element to make it very effective. Daebak!
Graphics (9.5/10):
First of, loved the posters, especially the half gradient one! It really bought the feel and mood of the story. Great job.
Character Development (9.5/10):
You’re development of characters were well portrayed and planned, I personally enjoyed reading on how you developed Minah’s character from a naïve, innocent and sweet 16 year old to a young witch who still carries those personality traits but, develops a stronger personality and character for her. Also, you definitely captured Exo’s character’s accurately! Made me RLAB! XD
Appearance (10/10):
Font size was excellent, easy to read, chapters were well balanced not to long and not to short, good and strong structure, very easy to follow through.
Originality & Plot (10/10):
Your story was definitely unique and different from the type of stories I’ve reviewed before. I could see the originality you put in with a small twist of Vampire Knight! Not many people can pull off a story that isn’t so clichéd or predictable but you have winged this gull!
Flow (10/10):
Chapters flowed through well, not too long and not too short. It was very smooth and enjoyable to read.
Writing (10/10):
I loved the way you wrote your story! it was very professional, and very easy to follow and understand the plot. You, my dear, have such an amazing talent for writing! Couldn’t help but to smile or laugh when it came to Exo. 🙂
Grammar & Spelling (8.5/10):
There were some minor grammar and spelling mistakes, but nothing too terrible, just be sure to proof read so you can edit out the mistakes in the future. 🙂 But other than that it was great!
Eg: [In Chapter 3]
1) Staining the stone bench a dark gray* with wet salty tears.(grey*)
2) Tao and I take* a seat at the kitchen counter and watched Eunmi cook. We started chatting (Took*)
3) Brings over two plates of Omelets* for us (Omelettes*)
General Enjoyment (10/10):
I’m really, really, really enjoying your story so far! So gonna go through it until the very end! Keep writing and updating! You’re doing an amazingly awesome job!
Total score: 97/100!
Reviewer: Bestfriend4eva (Aera)
Reviewed on: 05.27.14
Comments and thoughts: First of, Great job on this story so far! I’m really, really enjoying it! The way you portrayed your characters and written your chappies so far, just…. Wow. #gullicantexprainhowipheel 🙂 This is the first fantasy fic I’ve ever read, and it’s been a really enjoyable read so far! I’ve fallen in love with your story and looking forward to more updates! ^^ You have such a great talent for writing and I’ll be sure to read more of your works in the near future! XD
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